Teh Party ship

[EbonyStar]

(Nope, definitely did not. Otherwise I would've commented on how adorable it was)

Me: *pause* Either I'd laugh and say that's typical, or I'd be rendered speechless for, surprisingly, the second time this day.
Um, third, actually. COUGHdanCOUGH

[sojuske]

*raises an eyebrow* Dan? Dang? Danny? Danumental? (ok, that isn't a word...)

[EbonyStar]

HA! Danumental. I'll have to call him that sometime
Dan, the kid I like from school. I was rendered speechless for a teensy brief moment, cause he kinda came outta nowhere and caught me off guard ^.^;;;

*glares at Carrion* And not a word outta you on that subject. This is the only thing I'll get touchy about. The rest of the time I'm what you like to call "annoying," meaning calm, laid-back, and not caring what other people think of me

[sojuske]

Ah. That would do it. I remember you telling me about him before. Or telling us about him to be frank. When your sis was upset and stuffers... Anyways...
I wish I had someone I liked at school. Or better yet, that no guy liked me... at the moment. Well, to be specific, one guy...
Danny: Richard.
Me: I told you about him?
Danny: Yes, a few nights ago. Don't you remember?
Me: I think so... yes. Sorry.

[EbonyStar]

Don't be sorry, Sharon. Lord knows I've talked about Dan so much you guys know him as well as I do ;P
Not literally, but just makin an exaggerated observation

[Moonlight]

ebonystar said:

*glares at Carrion* And not a word outta you on that subject. This is the only thing I'll get touchy about. The rest of the time I'm what you like to call "annoying," meaning calm, laid-back, and not caring what other people think of me

CARRION: Um... all right?

ME: I gotta get goin', soon, Beej *kisses him*
BJ: Aw, but I'll see ya tomorrow, though?
ME: Of course! *kisses him more*

[EbonyStar]

Me: Good. Glad that's settled ;P
*randomly starts singing*

Shed your tears
Your liquid pain
That mingle with the falling rain
Free your fears
Your anxious dread
And if you still have tears to shed
Listen to me
Sing my song
Breathe the sky, there's nothing wrong
Set your soul free
Sing aloud
And rest your spirit on a cloud
Do not weep
You're in no harm
Just lay your troubles in my arms
Go to sleep
Don't fear, don't cry
Just listen to my lullaby

Lullaby for the Lost ~ Tara

Whoa. That was so uncharacteristically motherly of me o.0
If I ever have a kid of my own (Lord forbid. I loathe kids), I'll sing him/her this song. I gotta make up a tune and turn it into a piano piece, but I'll do that when I know how

[sojuske]

You wrote that Tara? That was really really nice..
And see you Jem.

[Moonlight]

Well, I see that the moment b/t me 'n BJ is over, so g'night, all!

No Tara-comment? No "awww?" LOL just kiddin' now g'night

[EbonyStar]

Bye Jem! See ya later!

And yup. I wrote that during lunch period when I was bored. Thanks, Sharon ^.^
I write other poems and stuff, but they aren't all that great. Just kinda messin around when I'm bored. I think one of my best to date is a spinoff of the way Poe wrote The Raven. It's got some sorta meaning I haven't figured out yet (me, who loves to analyze XP), but it's written in the same style The Raven's in

[Moonlight]

I'm obsessed with The Raven ^^

NOW I LEAVE!!!

[sojuske]

Are they all on your poetry account? Because I'm just like, envious a bit now.
Mainly because I cannot write, and I have no artistic talent what-so-ever. I can only emulate writing. I copy people.
To write in someones style a certain story like aspect I can do. But I can't write things on my own without a prompt. I can't really analyze things on my own without a prompt, and I can't write essays at all.

[EbonyStar]

Ha, see ya, Jem. I'll post my poem here if ya wanna read it

Ahem. Here we go (it's titleless, like most of my other poems, lately)

Stars gleam in the midnight hours
Sparks the sky almost devours
Though their radiance empowers dreaming souls to dare and soar
Reduced by their conceited host
The sky, his mannerings morose
A haven for benighted ghosts
At most, though vast, is nothing more
Than darkness that the stars abhor
And pierce with light, for evermore.

Titleless ~ Tara

Yup. I've got em all at allpoetry.com/poets/Ebonystar
They vary. A lot. So yeah ^.^;

[sojuske]

Heh, I like them... *bookmarks*
Maybe you can help me with the end of my poem? Which sucks I know, but the last two lines annoy me to no end.
And they really really annoy me...

As the lights dim and crowd screams
A vision appears, like out of a dream
Their God appears, apparently human until
The beat starts up, and time stands still.

He seems to grow with a fire within
His eyes wide open a with a feral grin
As he opens his mouth and begins to sing
Making you forget everything
You knew and accepted about the world
As reality begins to twist and twirl

White teeth shown with a breathless glee
Warning those not entranced to flee
As he gets closer to his prey
Directing their minds farther away

Sound and movement mesh together
The excitement like the formation of stormy weather
And then the storm breaks
Their God is spent
The rhythm is broken
Just like it was meant.
The hypnotism gone, reality returns
With the master waiting at the side
For the next time.

[EbonyStar]

Ooh. Chilling, dudette. Very chilling.
And you've got nice description goin there. Especially the use of the words "feral," "twist and twirl," and "breathless glee"
Very awesome

I dunno what advice I'd give, though. I can do things myself, but I'm really the worst teacher in the world. I just can't give people suggestions for their own work, specifically.
Just mess around. Try a bunch of different endings until you see one you like, or until you see a pattern developing in a fe different ones you like. Often writers will use the same words/phrases over and over again. I do it all the time, to be perfectly honest

I gotta turn in for the night, but I'll be on tomorrow. Probably during school sometime, what with all my free blocks. Chant for a snow day for me!

See ya later!
And Carrion, that was probably the most pleasant sequence of conversations we've had yet.

I'll see ya around. G'night!