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Post by Moonlight on Apr 13, 2006 18:30:08 GMT -5
That's spring break for ya ;P
If Tara doesn't come back soon, I'll have to say goodbye to Carrion.
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Post by EbonyStar on Apr 13, 2006 18:34:49 GMT -5
No! I'm here!!!
But say goodbye to Carrion, still ^.^
Sorry. I was taking a shower and talking to my mom, and then eating dinner. I doubt this paper is going to get written, but somehow I'm not that worried. I'll do half tonight and figure the rest out later ^.^;;; (if any of you ever have to pick your role model someday, do NOT pick me)
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Post by Moonlight on Apr 13, 2006 18:36:45 GMT -5
Oh, that's okay, Tara. I'll say goodbye later. I was waiting for you to come back so we could annoy him.
But if your paper must be done, then it must be done. ^^;;;
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Post by EbonyStar on Apr 13, 2006 18:41:01 GMT -5
Trust me, being here isn't keeping me from doing it. If I didn't have access to the internet, I'd find other ways of procrastinating  Now.....Carrion, wanna see a sample of my fanfic so far? I wrote some new stuff!  |
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Post by Moonlight on Apr 13, 2006 18:43:02 GMT -5
CARRION: .... *sigh* I guess. ME: You sound enthused! CARION: .... ME: CARRION: .... ME: CARRION: .... *turns attention back to Tara* |
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Post by EbonyStar on Apr 13, 2006 18:49:18 GMT -5
ME: *is trying very hard not to laugh at that whole little Jem/Carrion exchange* One minute, I need to go get it *runs out and laughs for a second before getting notebook and coming back* I just need to decide which part to show you. Keep in mind that I haven't woven it all together, and it isn't all in order or anything. I'll do that last. I'm just picking random bits and pieces and scenes and writing out chapter-long sections. I'll make it better later. And this writing isn't top-notch, cause I gotta go back and make a lot of revisions. Also--
EMBER: Just get ON with it
ME: ;P *flips through notebook*
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Post by Moonlight on Apr 13, 2006 18:53:11 GMT -5
ME: *is trying very hard not to laugh at that whole little Jem/Carrion exchange* It's so hard to keep that face.... CARRION: *says "just get on with it" in unison with Ember, not on purpose* ME: I'm sure it's fine, Tara. From what I've seen of your work, you're a good author. Probably better than me ;P reminds me... have you met Raalonn? |
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Post by EbonyStar on Apr 13, 2006 18:56:17 GMT -5
Trust me, I know. I tried that smile once, and I broke my face
CARRION: That explains a lot...
ME: *laughs* That's definitely something I would say
ME: Aw, you two are becoming friends!
EMBER: *raises eyebrow*
CARRION: .....
ME: .......*keeps searching*
Aw, thanks ^.^
Not formally, no
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Post by Moonlight on Apr 13, 2006 19:01:11 GMT -5
ME: Aw, you two are becoming friends! EMBER: *raises eyebrow* CARRION: ..... ME: .......*keeps searching* *laughs as the two glare at me* ....... *goes over and watches Tara search* You should! He's my favorite character in the story I'm writing. Well, I can't write a story with human characters very well. I always use animals. So that explains why I don't have very many characters in here ^^; Anyway, you should meet him. But I'll give you some time to find a part of your story, first ^^ |
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Post by EbonyStar on Apr 13, 2006 19:06:38 GMT -5
One of my stories is a big mix of human characters, animals, and fantasy creatures. There are some creatures that have elemental powers, and they're kind of a mix between a wolf and a horse. It's hard (impossible) to explain what they look like, but when I can draw really well, I'll make a sketch and show you ^.^;;;
Alright, here's a tiny little bit of the story. I haven't finished this fragment yet, which is why it's still a fragment. This is after Candy and her friends have escaped yet again from Carrion's clutches, and he returns to the dead Man's House in a rage
EMBER: *raises eyebrows*
ME: Yeah, it's good stuff. Letheo was out in the snow on Efreet with Carrion, but my character stayed inside. She's like Carrion's apprentice, but with more benefits than Letheo has
CARRION: *raises an eyebrow*
ME: .......oh, Lord no. I meant, like, I don't get a lot of orders to go get things for people or stuff like that. I mostly study magic and Abaratian history, and tag along when you do an errand or something like that, mostly to learn, but I rarely take part in most of the stuff. I kinda just watch
CARRION: I see...
ME: So, anyway, here's a little bit:
Carrion slammed open both doors with one thrust of his hand. Power shook in the air and sent both doors flying off their hinges and across the room. Tara hardly flinched as they hit the wall in splinters.
“Letheo! Come here! NOW!”
Tara still stood next to the stairs, her dark clothes camouflaging her in the shadows. She saw Letheo nearly drag himself into the Dead Man’s House, his skin turning a pale blue. Whether this was from the snowy air of Efreet or the transformation taking place inside of him, she couldn’t say, and she wasn’t sure she wanted to know.
Carrion had walked towards the stairs, but once Letheo appeared in the broken doorway of the house, he spun around to face the boy. Smoke drifted from the top of his staff and twirled in the air. It snaked around itself until it vanished, but even then its acrid stench filled the room, like the smell of burning rubber.
“This is a conspiracy,” Carrion said, his voice harsh. Again, Tara couldn’t be sure whether this was from the condition of Efreet, or some rage fueling her Lord’s menace. She placed her money on the latter.
“How did they know she was here?” he continued. “Who told them? And who were they, anyway, besides Finnegan?” Both teenagers noticed an extra spurt of venom at the man’s name. “Did you see him striking poses? Always the perfect Prince. So handsome, so brave. No doubt she thinks he’s flawless.” Had the situation been under different circumstances, Tara may have laughed at those last remarks. She had always appreciate sarcasm like that.
“You mean Candy?” Letheo asked, his voice hoarse from the stages of his transformation.
“Yes, Candy. Who else?”
Letheo’s eyes flickered very briefly, almost involuntarily, in Tara’s direction, then squeezed themselves shut. He slid down the wall and wrapped his arms around his stomach. “Just forget her. She’s nothing.”
That was kind of a stupid place to leave off, but whatever. That's all I have for that section so far
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Post by sojuske on Apr 13, 2006 19:09:02 GMT -5
Hi Tara, Jem.
I like what you have so far Tara. Only one thing I can see but that's grammar and you'd catch it later eh?
(and I don't like this sdsf thingy guy. Keep having to delete his stuff, it's annoying)
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Post by EbonyStar on Apr 13, 2006 19:10:32 GMT -5
Sharon! *hugs*
Thanks. I didn't see the grammar mistake (and that'll make me slap myself when I do see it). Can ya tell me what it is, please? Otherwise I'll obsess over it and get no sleep tonight. I'm a grammar freak. I correct my teachers all the time ^.^;;;
Never mind, I see it now, I think. Either that or I made more mistakes than I thought
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Post by Moonlight on Apr 13, 2006 19:11:35 GMT -5
Hi Sharon! *hug*
And that is REALLY good, Tara. ^^ I can't wait to read the whole thing...
It's 8:10 where I am. I have to go soon b/c I'm getting up at 4 in the morning, so I need to sleep. And I'm not a morning person, so I NEED to sleep...
Hey, do you wanna meet Raalonn? Or.... not?
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Post by sojuske on Apr 13, 2006 19:13:59 GMT -5
Aww *hugs* ok Jem.
I know I want to, and I know you were talking to Tara there. ^^; So heh.
And Tara, I'm pretty sure that "She had always appreciate sarcasm like that." is not grammatically correct. But that's the only flaw I could see of course.
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Post by EbonyStar on Apr 13, 2006 19:14:06 GMT -5
I can't wait til the whole thing's written ^.^;;;
Yes! But don't stay too late if you need sleep. I mean, tomorrow I'll b here as late as I can, because when I wake up early for flights I'm more awake than I am on a school day. And I don't sleep on planes, so there's that, too ^.^;;;
Yep, that's the one I saw, too, Sharon. I fixed it on Word, though, so that's all set for the future. Thanks for pointing that out, I would've missed that completely
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